Saturday 5 May 2012

One Hundred Word Challenge - Ruby



“Ruby!” her mother called excitedly.

A sandy hair girl skipped into the room and sat on her Mothers’ lap.

“I’ve booked us a caravan - for a little holiday.”

“Cool.” Ruby replied “I died in fire in a caravan once.  It was called Vixen.”

“What?” her Mothers response was slow.  Ruby, seeing her Mothers worried expression touched her cheek.

“It’s o.k.  It didn’t hurt, I was asleep.” Ruby went to play as an email notification sounded on her Mothers phone.

“Booking Confirmation.”  It read “We are pleased to confirm your recent booking of our two berth, gold standard caravan – The Vixen.”

Linking up with JB47 One Hundred Word Challenge - The prompt - 'Ruby'

16 comments:

  1. Ooooh, creepy - can almost hear some spooky atmospheric music with this one.

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  2. Whoooaaaa! Cancel it at once! A brilliantly told story in 100 words. Well done.

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  3. Noooooooo! Hit delete booking button now. That was really good - great twist at the end.

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  4. Thank you for the positive feedback everyone! This was one of my facing the fear tasks, to write something fictional and release to whoever was kind enough to read. A big step for me!

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    1. Keep taking those steps Lynsey! We need to see more. :)

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  5. I never did like caravan holidays - suggest you cancel it. Brilliant stuff.

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  6. Really spooooky! A good idea. Well done.

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  7. Well done for getting that sense of dread in so few words. Very nicely done.

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  8. Thank you everyone, for the positive feedback! I really enjoyed this challenge and am looking forward to the next one!

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  9. A very insightful child ... a little
    mysterious and fightenting. Well done ...
    Isadora
    http://insidethemindofisadora.wordpress.com/2012/05/02/ruby/

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  10. Missed this one but found it through the bones, excellent!

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  11. Ooh, very spooky! Great story, very chilling. Polly

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  12. Oh my, I would cancel that reservation! Love how you tied this one in with the next one.

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  13. I'm impressed. Less than a 100 words! That's brilliant.

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