Tuesday 22 May 2012

One Hundred Word Challenge : Spooky Ruby Part 4

This weeks One Hundred Word Challenge #43 from Julia's Place is to include the prompt :

...The flame flickered before...


Please read on for Spooky Ruby Part 4
For links to part one click here, two here and three here.

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The flame flickered before her eyes on top of the coffin.

She focused on it, unblinking.  The only thing she could look at, as she held her swelling ball of grief within. 

She couldn’t look at his photo on the stand.  The flowers:  F.A.T.H.E.R.  H.U.S.B.A.N.D. 

She couldn’t look at his Mother on her right, or Ruby on her left. 

But she could feel their presence.  Sense their pain.

She drifted into a daze and was transported back to her bad dream of watching a flickering light.

Flames. 

Licking at the night sky.

The caravan spread around the ground, in a hundred, million pieces.

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9 comments:

  1. This is turning out to be a dark story.. I love it.

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  2. Slowly the pieces are coming together. I'm hooked.

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  3. Noooooooooooooooooooo! Don't tell me they ended up going on the caravan holiday, and he died. And now mother in law blames her for his death? I didn't see that coming!

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  4. EEEkk! I've always had a bad feeling about caravans!

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  5. I went back and read the preceeding installments, but I don't completely understand the story. From the comments above, I'm thinking this chapter is a flashback?

    I'll have to come back next week to see how you pull the existing parts together and move it all forward. You've got a lot of story here to work with, so you've made Julia's challenge into a great way to practice the essentials that'll make this into a compelling story.

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  6. Great continuation of the story; I think this is something that I will try to do-I look forward to seeing how this progresses :)

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  7. alone, yet aware...nicely done. :)

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  8. I love the way this story is turning out - very spooky! Looking forward to the next part. Polly x

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I would love for you to quack your thoughts along with me and will always try and quack right back.